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Of Marketing and Monopoly

January 21, 2023 / lmkling / Leave a comment

Marketing Books and Monopoly—My Journey around the Board

Recently, my brother introduced me to “Monopoly for Sore Losers”. Since, in my family I have the reputation from childhood, reinforced and maintained by those around me as a “sore loser”, I had to get it. As I played the game, I realised how much marketing and being a dominant player on the internet, is like Monopoly and Mr. Monopoly from the “Sore Loser” edition, like the “Best Sellers” on Amazon.

Now, about marketing, I’m not an expert by any means. But, since I began this indie-publishing journey back in late 2015, I have learnt what works for me.

This last summer, for me in Australia, I have been concentrating on the “housekeeping” side of marketing my books. Thus, my first, Mission of the Unwilling, had a makeover and re-released as a second edition. Then all four books cycled through their five-day free promotion on Amazon. Next I’m looking into paying some money for advertising.

It seems my marketing skills have a way to go in gaining a monopoly on Amazon shelves and being sold. You see, marketing and advertising one’s product, my books and artwork, takes time. The issue with time is that I’d rather be creating than slogging away pushing my product in an already saturated market.

When I started on this journey, I, like many a writer, thought that mine was the great (insert country) novel, that readers will be hanging out to get their hands on. The book would sell itself. It didn’t happen, as I dreamed.

A foray into the publishing world, and its history reveals an unexpected picture. Although amazing authors and brilliant books exist, and are sold in abundance world-wide, the literary world is full of mediocre tomes stacked on the shelves of bookshops and online distributers. Some are bestsellers.

How, is this so?

Answer, effective marketing. Often, especially with traditional publishing, the writers have a “platform”. Traditional publishing is a business and they go for the safe option—someone who is famous or becomes famous through their authored works. They bank on reader curiosity, who sells well, has a “brand” and longevity.

Needless to say, I didn’t have a “platform”. However, I have been developing a network and influence through my “blogsite” and Website, “Tru-Kling Creations”, and most recently this publishing collective, “Indie Scriptorium”.

The challenge with my blogsite when I first started was to make it visible. Way back in 2015, it was so buried by the competition, that I couldn’t even find it—even when I typed in the precise address.

After embarking on some more research, I discovered a phenomena called “algorithms”. To put it simply, think of Monopoly; the more properties you acquire, the more likely someone is to land on you.

In my blogsite’s case, the more visitors you get, the more visible your site becomes. The “Mr. Monopolies” of the cyberworld actually employ computer experts to manipulate the algorithms. That is how a mediocre book can become a bestseller.

So, how do we, the so called “Plebs” of the internet, compete with these “Mr. Monopolies”? How do we get our blog/webpage onto page 1? How can our masterpieces rise to the top like cream and become bestsellers like they ought to be?

Well, first make sure our books are the best they can be. Start with good editing and proofreading. Check out Indie Scriptorium’s posts on editing. Then once you and your test-readers are satisfied with your product, then the next step is marketing and advertising. This includes doing your research, figuring out who your audience is, and pitching to your potential readers.

As I wrote before, I found that blogging and setting up a webpage has worked for me. I now have over 550 followers of my blog. But it has taken time. I found that inviting friends and family to follow, visit and like my posts helped boost activity. This then led to a wider-worldwide audience. I persevered. I’m still in the game. Even though I am not like some bloggers who have thousands of followers, I am encouraged when I get visitors who come via the “Search Engine” as it means my blogs are visible.

It’s the same with our books and the competition from the big sellers, those Mr. Monopolies of the book world. True, the mediocre best sellers will have their time in the sun. But, it won’t last. Good literature, I believe will shine through in the end. I realise now, that my novels are not the great Australian work I had dreamed they were, but for some who have read them, they have found great enjoyment, and are asking, ‘When’s the next one coming out?’

© Lee-Anne Marie Kling 2023

Feature Photo: Product placement; another way of advertising (and it’s not just Monopoly) © L.M. Kling 2023

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Grammar Made Easy–Jan’s Gran’s Van

October 29, 2022 / lmkling / Leave a comment

Jan’s Gran’s Van

Following on from “Raised commas aka Dratted apostrophes” back in September, we thought you might enjoy the following text of a children’s story featuring these pesky punctuation marks (taken to a somewhat bizarre level, we must admit). Bizarre as they are, in this piece we can assure you that this is grammatically correct.

Jan and her Gran

Jan has a Gran,

Gran belongs to Jan

And Jan has fun with her Gran.

Jan’s Gran has a van.

The van belongs to Gran,

Gran belongs to Jan

And Jan has fun with her Gran.

Jan’s Gran’s van had wings,

the wings belonged to the van,

the van belongs to Gran,

Gran belongs to Jan

and Jan has fun with her Gran.

Jan’s Gran’s van’s wings had nuts.

The nuts belonged to the wings,

the wings belonged to the van,

the van belongs to Gran,

Gran belongs to Jan

and Jan has fun with her Gran.

Jan’s Gran’s van’s wings nuts held the wings onto Jan’s Gran’s van

so Jan and her Gran could hop in the van and go off on trips.

They would jump in that van

and then they were off,

up, up and off.

            Off to spots that were cold

            and spots that were hot.

Spots that were wet

and spots that were not—

up, up and off

                  to fun spots galore.

Then it was spring and a trip was planned.

They packed lots of things—

        Drinks…

            lunches…

                        rugs…

                                  maps…

BUT!

When they checked the van

            the nuts fell off.

            When the nuts fell off

            the wings fell off.

           When the wings fell off

                       they could not

                                    be up, up and off.

So that trip was off.

Jan was sad.

Jan’s Gran was sad.

But the van would still go—

NOT up, up and up

but still…

                        it WOULD go.

That van could still go on trips—

lots and lots.

            So Jan and her Gran

            plugged up the spots where the wings fell off.

Then—

            in they hopped

            and off they went,

Jan and her Gran

in the van with no wings.

They went

            to spots that were cold

            and spot that were hot,         

            spots that were wet

            and spots that were not—

Fun spots galore!

        And Jan…

            STILL has fun with her Gran.

© Mary McDee 2022

Feature Photo: Floral Caravan and Car at Adelaide flower festival © Sam Gross circa 1960

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On Writing–Getting Going

October 15, 2022October 15, 2022 / lmkling / Leave a comment

CRIPPLED BY THE SYSTEM – BUT NOT ANYMORE!

For many, many years I was convinced that I “couldn’t write” even though I loved reading, even though I had ideas zooming around in my head, even though I loved words and playing around with them, even though I made up endless stories…

I did write poems, but they were different from stories.  My poems were little, short snippets of language where the words were crafted in my head, fiddled around with to get the best ones in the best place, where everything sounded just right before I had to record them on paper.  That was fun.  There was a sense of achievement.

Stories and essays were a very different kettle of fish.  They were hard work.  Producing them was a matter of painstaking drudgery that began in Primary school.  Back then, at the start of every school year children were issued with a heap of pristine exercise books that had to be taken home, covered and had our own name and the particular subject name written neatly on the front.

The expectation was that the work in each one was to be our very best.  No scribbling; no scratching out; no careless, untidy work; no crumpled or torn pages.  In other words, by the end of the year that exercise book should be as pristine as it had been on day one but full of work in our very best handwriting.  Unattainable perfection for most of us!!

As far as writing was concerned the two that were my nemesis; my tragic downfalls were labelled Handwriting and Composition.  The former was bad enough, but it was the latter that led to my conviction: “I can’t write”.  Apart from the “Product Perfect” headset the other thing about compositions was that they had to be written straight into the composition book with correct spelling, perfect punctuation, excellent handwriting… no rough copy, no first draft, no preliminary notes. Straight from the brain cells to the page; no muckin’ about.

If I wanted to use a nice long expressive word like ginormous but didn’t know how to spell it correctly, I had to make do with a little short one I could spell (big) because errors were out, frowned upon, seen as evidence of lack of learning, failure…  Where was the interest or excitement in that?  I was effectively crippled.

Fortunately, education in this area seems to have moved on.  Composition books as I knew them have gone the way of the dodo.  Teachers and students now talk about first drafts and final copies.  Thanks be.

If you can relate to that last paragraph then count your blessings and keep pouring your ideas, thoughts, stories out onto paper or into your computer.  If it is the rest (or even part of the rest) and you want to write but think you can’t then ditch the doubts, grab a writing implement – pen, paper, computer – jump in and make a splash.  Mistakes and stuffing up are potholes, not impassable roadblocks.

We learn by doing!  And lots of practice!!  So go to it and good luck.

© Mary McDee 2022

Feature Photo: Censored 1939 courtesy of L.M. Kling — Postcard sent from the Deutsches Reich 1939 (an example of perfect? handwriting).

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Effective Writing–Make it Zing

October 1, 2022October 2, 2022 / lmkling / Leave a comment

Make your writing Zing!

I’m writing my third novel and still learning. Making my writing more dynamic and engaging is one skill I’m trying to develop. I’ve known while some scenes are full of emotion and action, other parts of my draft tend to wither into bland backstory or boring prose. I need to make my writing Zing.

The rule of “show not tell” is one of the writing rules churned out to fix boring writing. But what do we mean by showing, not telling?

I interpret showing as progressing the storyline by having my character storm around the scene with white lips, beating heart, clenched fists, and flashing eyes. They might be overcome by the smell of roses and hear the plaintive warble of a magpie. Yes, it’s all about the senses. Oh, don’t forget taste, she says with a mouthful of ashes.

Telling is informing your reader that your character is angry, smelt roses, heard a magpie, and has halitosis. Not really Zingy.

I entered a competition with my second novel and received lovely feedback from most of the judges. One judge, however, was less complimentary and hated much of what I had written. Gosh, that hurt. Despite all the warm fuzzy praise, I took the negative critique to heart, then dismissed it. After all, the other judges liked what I had written, and I got into the finals. But after I got over the elation, I took out the negative critique and with trembling hands read the judgement again.

They were right. There was critique I discarded; I honestly felt they were looking for a traditional romantic story and my novel didn’t fit the bill. But their critique of my prose was insightful and confronting and right. I will illustrate this using the actual paragraph the judge picked out to illustrate his/her point.

My line— “Eleanor had more energy and a new zest for life.”

Judges’ line— “Energy sizzled inside her, driving her to paint. Oh, how wonderful it was to pick up a brush and apply paint to a canvas again. Now that she’s accepted the facts, her life had become much better and full of zest.”

The judge’s line is full of Zing. It goes inside Eleanor, makes her feel the energy, expresses her joy, and put her emotion into the action of painting. She actively accepts that she cannot have a child, and acceptance improves her mood and energy.

I believe changing my writing style to make it Zing will require practice. I am writing a first draft of my third novel and have decided that just getting the story down is my priority. But enlivening my prose will take second priority. I will add another layer of editing with the express purpose of Zinging my prose.

Another technique for adding Zing is to use dialogue. Have characters, explain things, pontificate, console, complain, fight, disclose, advise, snub, berate order, and entice. Conversations are fun and show your character’s motivations, desires, beliefs, and points of view. They can also show how a character learns something, amends their belief, and grows as a character. Using secondary characters, friendly or not, will help your character interact and make your writing Zing. Have a look at Agatha Christie, for a masterful example of storytelling using dialogue

Sandy Vaile in her article Clarify, ‘showing for good’  provides excellent advice about aspects of active story telling. I found her ideas about placing characters in challenging situations edifying. If I’m writing a dramatic scene with action my writing Zings, my prose is stronger, and the words flow. But not all my scenes have an elevated level of conflict. In the future, I will plot more scenes with conflict. The conflict could be an internal battle with a problem or emotions or an external conflict with another person or situation but making life difficult for heroes and heroines is my new goal.

Another way to make your writing Zing is to make sure each sentence is active. I’m the queen of the passive voice but I came across a great explanation for active and passive sentences in Sandy Vaile’s’ article. Sandy states you should put the action first and the subject second and gives wonderful examples.

Passive–Tina’s homework was marked in red pen by Mrs. Gleeson. (The subject before the verb/action)

Active–Mrs. Gleeson marked Tina’s homework with a red pen. (The verb/action before the subject)

Passive–The burglar was tackled by the detective.

Active–The detective tackled the burglar.

I’m still learning about active prose. As I’m writing my first draft, some days the words flow and some days they don’t and that is often because of the setting of the scene. Planning more active and challenging situations in my plotting, adding secondary characters who engage my protagonist in active dialogue and making my characters use their senses are all techniques to master. Getting the passive/active voice is also a challenge.

Happy writing.

***

Acknowledgements

Sandy Vaile. Clarify ‘showing for good’ Romance Writers of Australia Hearts Talk August 2022.

Sandy Vaile is a motorbike-riding daredevil who writes romantic-suspense for Simon & Schuster US and supports fiction authors to produce novels they are proud to share with the world (and which get noticed by agents and publishers), through coaching, craft workshops and developmental editing.  

Connect with  

Sandy Vaile

www.linktr.ee/fearlessprose

© Elsie King 2022

Feature Photo: A Difficult Environment © L.C. Wong

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On Editing–No Writer is an Island

September 24, 2022September 24, 2022 / lmkling / Leave a comment

[Currently, I’m editing Diamonds in the Cave, the next novel in my War on Boris series. This article, though first posted five years ago, is a pertinent reminder of all that the editing process involves.]

Editing—No Writer is an Island

Some time ago, a member of our writers’ group published a book.

‘I don’t want to tell anyone,’ they said, ‘because I needed a lot of help.’

Certain members of the writers’ group ensured they revealed and celebrated the news; their achievement was our achievement. A book doesn’t happen in isolation; it’s a group effort. Just as a village raises a child, for the best outcome, a community or group births a book. There’s the writer with the ideas, then comes the editor, test-readers, friends and family, the proof-reader and finally, the audience, the readers out there in reader-world.

We write stories for readers, that’s why the editing process is vital. A story needs to be readable to be effective. Readers need to understand the story to enjoy it. It’s the reason language, especially written language has rules for grammar, spelling, and the art of storytelling has a structure.

So, you’ve finished your masterpiece, but now the challenge: how will you go about editing your work? That’s where the writers’ group comes in. Fellow writers are your work’s first point of contact. Their reaction to your story will tell you if your creation is a winner or a flop. Either way, there will be more work required to perfect your piece of genius—more pen to paper, more fingers tapping on the keyboard, more pain and hair-pulling before your work can be “birthed”.

Once you have completed your work, file it away in a drawer for about three months. You need distance between you and your “baby”. When you revisit your work, you may be amazed at how brilliant you have been putting all those words together in such a clever way, or be horrified at how the gremlins of grammar, spelling, typos, weasel words, repetitions, and so on have bred and multiplied. With fresh eyes, you’ll see ways to improve your story, thus creating your second draft.

Repeat the process of draft and distance until you feel it’s ready to meet fresh eyes that don’t belong to you. But who?

Ever had trouble getting someone to peruse your work? Suddenly, they’re all busy. Or they take your story and sit on it for months, years… Again, happy are those in a writers’ group. Or be bold and blog. If you are wanting to sell your novel down the track, having a http://www.presence and band of followers may help.

For those finishing-touches to refining your work, you may seek out a professional editor. When paying an editor, ensure that you define the time and rates in a contract. For Trekking With the T-Team, I negotiated an hourly rate and a limit on the number of hours the editor would work on my book.

There are two types of editing: big picture and proof-reading. Big picture editing looks at the plot, pace, character development, language use and content. Proof-reading deals with the technical side of the work such as grammar, spelling, and formatting. But as my friend who’s an editor said, ‘It’s hard to separate the two. If the content and ideas trigger you, then it’s difficult to be objective and it affects how you respond to the piece.’

So, while it may be preferable for an editor to be outside the genre in which you are writing, it may not work for your book. A good editor, of course, is impartial, but they are still human and will approach your story from their worldview. And on the other side, we as writers are human and see the world through a filter of attitudes and the way we see ourselves. A good editor who is paid, then, is only as good as the receptiveness to feedback of the writer who pays them. After all, you are paying for that objective set of eyes, and feedback based on their experience as a reader and what they perceive as good literature or entertainment. In the end, whatever comments an editor makes, it’s up to you, the writer, to implement those changes—it’s your work, your story.

The last step of editing is proof-reading; the nit-picking of the piece before it surfaces for publication. Ernest Hemmingway, in an interview for The Paris Review (1958), said that he rewrote the end of Farewell to Arms 39 times before he was satisfied with it. However, each writer is different. I use five different coloured pencils: 1) grammar, 2) spelling, 3) word-use, 4) formatting, and 5) content. That being said, I am sure I have perused my works near 39 times by the time it reaches the Amazon shelves.

Other tips:
• Reading out aloud helps with sentence structure, flow, and the art of storytelling. Even better, if you can bear it, use a voice-recorder as you read out your story, and then play it back.
• Line by line editing. Print out your story and then use a ruler under each sentence to concentrate on each word. Effective for exposing typos and formatting flaws.
• Start with the last chapter first, and so work through your piece backwards. Again, helps with plot-holes, character consistency and pacing.
• Have an English grammar book and a dictionary within reach, for you’ll be reaching for them repeatedly. I’ve discovered that an online dictionary, or Google are also reliable resources, but beware, as dodgy information slips through the cracks of the Internet.

In the end, it’s up to you, but it’s also a group effort. We are all part of the larger community collective of writers, readers, sharers and receivers of ideas. And I cannot stress enough, the more you read, the more effective your writing will become. We learn from each other.

© Lee-Anne Marie Kling 2017; 2022
Feature Photo: Le Mont St. Michel, France © Lee-Anne Marie Kling 1998

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Grammar Made Easy–Apostrophes

September 17, 2022September 17, 2022 / lmkling / Leave a comment

RAISED COMMAS  aka  “DRATTED APOSTROPHES”

These little things seem to cause more angst, confusion and errors than any other feature of our written language.  There is even a move afoot to eliminate them altogether.  Which would be tragic as they play a critical role in clarifying meaning.  By way of demonstration, can you decode the precise meaning of each of the following phrases:

1. The dog’s collar;                                                                                                                                

2. The dogs’ collars;                                                                                                                                  

3. The dog’s collars;                                                                                                                   

 4. The dogs’ collar.

Three words; the only differences being that two of the final words end in ‘s’ and also the position of the apostrophe.  Yet each of those four has a very different meaning and, lacking that little squiggle, the meaning would be, not only obscure, but impossible to work out.  Context could help of course but not necessarily.  Why make life harder than it need be?

Let’s see if I can clarify the issue.  Apostrophes have one job to do, and one only.  Part of the confusion lies in the fact that this one job has two different aspects to it.

The one job is that it indicates something has been left out so therefore it is a form of abbreviation.  

This happens when we turn speech into writing. When speaking we tend to hurry things along a bit – it’s much easier to say can’t and didn’t than cannot and did not.  Used in this way our squiggle is termed an “Apostrophe of Contraction” because we have left out, not only the space between two words, but one or more of the sounds and  therefore, the letters that represent those sounds, when we put it into writing.

The second instance is called the “Apostrophe of Possession” and is somewhat more complex.  But not impossible as there is a rule you can follow that simplifies things beautifully.  Before we get onto this “rule” let’s sort out just what is left out though.

Possession means someone or something belongs to someone or something; alternatively there is an owner and who or what is owned by that owner.  Thus it always involves two naming words (i.e. nouns in grammar speak).  For instance “Jane’s brooch” tells us that Jane owns the brooch; the brooch belongs to Jane.  Thus it is the words denoting ownership that have been omitted.

Well then, what is this rule that is going to simplify things?                                                                   

Take a deep breath and follow the steps:                                                                                                                        

1.  Work out who or what is the owner and what is being owned.                                            

 2.  Write down the name of the owner and nothing else.  If it is a person then the name is easy but if it happens to be more than one thing (e.g. a couple of dogs; a herd of cows; a fleet of yachts…) the owner is plural so that is what you must write down.                                                                                                                                    

3.  Add the apostrophe.                                                                                                                        

 4.  Say the phrase aloud (owner and what it is that belongs to that owner) listening carefully.  If you hear yourself saying “s” (or an extra “s” if the owner’s name happens to end in “s”) on the end of the owner then add it.                                                                                        

5.  Write down what is owned.

Done!  And done correctly.

The result can, on occasion look quite bizarre.  By way of example consider the following:  A visitor arrives, is welcomed and asked to take a seat; heads for a comfortable looking chair but host says, “Sorry, please don’t sit there.  That’s puss’s chair”.  Go through the steps and you’ll see this is grammatically correct, both spoken and written

Were you able to sort out the dogs and collars puzzle I gave you in the beginning?               

If not, here is the solution:                                                                            

1.  The dog’s collar (one dog and one collar – presumably that collar belongs to that dog).                                                                                                                                                                                 

2.  The dogs’ collars (several dogs each with its own collar).                                                                  

3.  The dog’s collars (obviously a pampered pooch with a whole wardrobe of collars!!).                                                                                                                                                            

4.  The dogs’ collar (possibly a succession of family dogs with the same collar serving several generations.  Or maybe – sad to say – several dogs having to share the same collar!!).                                                                  

© Mary McDee 2022

Feature Photo: The Dogs’ Collars © L.M. Kling 2013

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Publishing Tips–Writing a Standout Synopsis

September 10, 2022 / lmkling / Leave a comment
“You need a sparkling synopsis.” ~ Fiona McIntosh 2015

So, what do you need after you have edited your novel? If you intend to submit it for publication or to an agent, a synopsis is a requirement. Even in self-publishing, a synopsis is a great exercise to summarise your novel for marketing and creating your blurb.

A synopsis is more than a summary of your novel. It must capture the attention of a publisher or agent. A working document, it condenses your plot succinctly, introduces the major protagonists, defines the conflict, and ties it all up into a logical and satisfying ending.

There is a plethora of web pages devoted to the art of writing a perfect synopsis. It is well worth Googling “how to write a synopsis for a novel.” You will find a treasure trove of information. I found two web sites helpful when writing this piece for the Indie Scriptorium blog. https://jericowriters.com and https://www.masterclass.com/articles/how-to-write-a-novel-synopsis-step-by-step-guide and have summarised their information.

  • Start with a pitch line that demands attention.
  • Announce the title and mention the genre, word count, setting and era.
  • The synopsis must be short and easy to read. I recommend one page. Single spaced with a word count of 500-700 words but if submitting a novel for a competition, agent, or publisher check if they have specific requirements.
  • Grammar, spelling, and word selection must be perfect. The synopsis is selling you as a writer. Get it checked by someone with editing skills.
  • Write in the third person and use gender neutral language. E.g., police officer, not policeman.
  • Cover all the major plot points, including spoilers and the ending. There should be no mysteries in a synopsis. The publisher wants to know you have finished the book, and it has a great ending.
  • Name two or three of major protagonists and their motivations. Bring them alive. Demonstrate how they grow and change and make them shine.
  • Clearly convey the tone of the novel but the emphasis is the story, allow the theme to sneak in without belabouring the point.
  • Avoid praising yourself in a synopsis or include positive reader reviews.

Expect to write, rewrite, rewrite and then do it again so give yourself time to get it right.

Elsie King © 2022                                                                  Photo © L.C. Wong 2022

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Writing: That Question–Characters

September 3, 2022September 4, 2022 / lmkling / 1 Comment

Writing Tips: Developing Your Characters and Story

That Question

Question: What makes a story stand out for you? What makes you want to read past the first page? The first chapter? The first book? Or if you are watching shows on your favourite streaming service, what makes you want to forget about all else and binge?

I like crime shows, mostly not-so-real crime such as “Midsomer Murders”, “True Detective” and quirky ones like “Fargo”. Yeah, I could go on, see what I mean? I’ve been bingeing.

You might think, strange for a Sci-Fi (Indie) author. Not surprising, then, I’ve considered doing the reverse of John Wyndham and move genre from Sci-Fi to Crime Fiction. We’ll see…Meanwhile, there’s my travels with the T-Team and the latest the T-Team with Mr. B to look forward to. Funny about that story, Elsie King read it and gave feedback. She suggested the character of Mr. B would fit well into a murder mystery. After initially rejecting the idea, I started working on a character who possessed some of Mr. B’s endearing personality and behaviours in a draft for a future murder mystery.

Anyway, the thing about successful crime shows is how they engage the audience to know the people involved, the characters. The key to the crime (or any genre for that matter) is what the characters want, what they really want, influences their actions, that, in time, lead to tragic consequences. For example, a woman who wants, more than anything else, wealth and security, commits fraud and murder to fulfil her desires.

The question, what your character wants, applies to any story, novel in any genre you write. In one of my recent posts (Choice Bites–Minna) on my website Tru-Kling Creations, Mission of the Unwilling heroine, Minna, in her encounter with Boris came out of an exercise to get to know my characters and what they want most.

Understanding your character’s history helps the reader invest in your character and want to know them more. Whether they are good, like Minna, or an evil antagonist like Boris, exploring your character’s bio, and giving the reader a taste of their history, engages the reader in your character’s life-journey.

Again, the Boris story evolved for me as I delved into the murky depths of Boris’ life; how this alien cockroach as a power-hungry despot destroyed his own world through greed, and then sought to dominate all worlds in the galaxy in the quest to rebuild his empire. I also investigated why he singled out Earth and took revenge on her people.

Then one sunny day, as I sat on my back patio, I made a study of my characters; their personalities, backgrounds, and interactions with each other…and by the end of the afternoon, The Hitch-hiker evolved.

Novels are about people—characters. Stuck with your novel’s progress? Writer’s block? Spend an afternoon developing your characters; interview them, find out what their interests are, their birthdate, parents, likes, dislikes, and what they want most. Soon you’ll have them all sitting at a table in a restaurant, discussing, or arguing with each other. You’ll see their story-lines weave in and out like a tapestry. Conflicts will arise, resolutions made with a twist, and villains and heroes will leap out from your computer screen, or page.

Our novels, our stories are life, and life is people. The reality is no one is an island. Even a convict in solitary confinement had parents, had a journey, a reason he ended up in solitary, and people who put him there.

So, getting back to the question, “What makes a story stand out for you?” Here’s the take-away—even simple entertainment, the characters are the key. Get to know your characters, and they will give you a story.

Begin by asking your character: What do you want most in life?

© Lee-Anne Marie Kling 2016; updated 2022

Jetty Boys © M.E. Trudinger circa 1958

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We invite you, as our audience to respond.

What makes a story stand out for you?

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Writing Tips–Copy Editing

August 27, 2022 / lmkling / Leave a comment

Editing—Copy Editing

This edit is most effective when you have finished the structural edit and are satisfied that your story reads, flows well, and makes sense.

Copy editing, also called “line editing” or “content editing”, means that you go through your manuscript line by line to make sure each sentence and paragraph zing.

I find copy editing difficult. I just don’t see the grammar and spelling errors and lose focus quickly. Knowing your weakness as a writer is important and I use whatever help I can to line edit my work.

Lorena Goldsmith suggests you don’t edit from the beginning of your manuscript and work through to the end as you will get caught up in the story and the last chapters tend to suffer as you rush to finish. She advises that skipping around the manuscript is more helpful. Select several pages for editing, then skip to another part of the book and select the next lot of pages. This helps you stay focussed and ensures consistency.

I do multiple edits, each with a different focus. I might edit looking for contractions and adverbs in one edit, and then look at sentence length and overuse of words. Editing for me is a tedious process, but others love it and are geniuses at spotting mistakes. Give them a red pen and they edit like tigers. Revere and reward these people.

Cheating or not, I also use technology. Microsoft Word has a good basic spelling and grammar check and thesaurus. I also use a program called ProWritingAid, which has multiple checks and reviews for the editing impaired. I also pay a professional editor who hones my words into the final draft for proof-reading.

The following is a checklist of things to look for when editing. It’s not definitive.

  • Have I used the right word/s. Is the meaning clear? Replace a word with a stronger word.
  •  Remove weak/or excessive verbs and adverbs. E.g., He walked quickly, replace with He marched. She spoke gently, replaced by she leaned over and whispered.
  • Eliminate filler words (for example: just, really, very, that, even.)
  • Is the selected word in the right mood for the sentence/scene?
  •  Look at word usage. Everyday words are easy to read and understand and don’t stop the flow for the reader. Mix up words, use a thesaurus to find the right word for your line.
  • Is the word politically correct?
  • Look for long sentences.
  • Does the sentence make sense?
  • Is the paragraph too long?
  • Are you explaining things too much and repeating information unnecessarily?
  • Do paragraphs start with the same word, the same style? Mix up your beginnings.
  • Show not tell. Don’t say “He was nervous” use sweat made him cold as the biting wind cut the air from around him.
  • Avoid describing emotions. Instead, write a description of your character that incorporates what they smell, hear, feel, see, and touch in their situation that conveys the emotion.
  • Dialogue–does it flow naturally? Use contractions, e.g. I will to I’ll, as this makes the dialogue more realistic. Does each character have their own voice? Remove unnecessary dialogue, such as “Hello, how are you?” “Yes, good thank you.” It’s just boring. The dialogue should be relevant and move the story along, so make it snappy.
  • Reduce dialogue attributions. “Where are you going Jim?” Jane asked. Unnecessary, if only Jane and Jim are in the scene.
  • Look out for cliches. Make metaphors and similes unique and interesting.

After completing your structural and line edit, give it a read. If it’s easily read, tight, well-paced and without obvious bloopers, send it to a professional editor or a competent astute fellow writer. Make amendments, and then it’s ready for the “Proof reading” edit and formatting.

Reference: Lorena Goldsmith-Self Editing Fiction that Sells. (How to Book Ltd. UK-2013)

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Happy editing from Elsie King ©August 27th, 2022

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Writing Journey–My Mission

August 20, 2022August 20, 2022 / lmkling / Leave a comment

My Mission, My Journey

A Very, Very, No, I mean VERY Good Idea

In 2008, my late uncle who was playwright and author flicked through the wads of paper, an early version of my manuscript called “Mary’s Story”. He didn’t like Science Fiction. He called it “Soap Opera in space”.

‘Well, at least you have only typed on one side of the page—you can use the other side, at least.’

“My baby” judged and found wanting and for very good reason. Uncle outlined all that was wrong with the novel—weasel words, you know the ones ending in “-ly”, and a thesaurus of words other than “said”, a parade of passives and you name it, I did it—wrong—in “my baby”.

‘And,’ he went on, ‘you need to number the pages.’

Good point.

‘But,’ Uncle stressed, ‘and this is a very, very, good idea. I don’t mean very good, I mean very, very, very good.’ He leafed through to near the end of the manuscript and pointed at the paragraph on the Wends. ‘I like the idea about the Wends.’

Historical fiction was Uncle’s thing.

Anyway, the next novel I was writing at the time, Diamonds in the Cave, has Wends. Thus began the formulation of a future novel, The Lost World of the Wends.

Then the best advice ever and for which I’m forever grateful to my late Uncle Richard. ‘Join a writers’ group,’ he said.

I did and I love it. Writing is a craft and I needed to hone my skill with the gentle and sometimes not-so-gentle feedback from my writing companions and mentor.

Mary’s Story was shoved in a box and hidden in the closet, never to see the light of a computer screen and I moved on. The group enjoyed my Central Australian Safari story. Yay!

Then in 2010, inspired by the biblical account where Jesus healed the man with the withered arm, I remembered Mary’s Story languishing in the closet. With my honed writing skills, I reworked the novel, plotting, developing characters, and cutting all those not-so-wonderful weasel words. I read successive chapters to the group and they got stuck into that all important helpful feedback. More changes—Mary morphed into Minna, Gunter morphed into a Grey alien and then Fox and then back to Gunter. The Hitch-hiker was born. The back story to Liesel’s itch to touch developed. And the word “was” culled.

Happy with the result in 2011, I emailed “my refined baby” to my mentor. Over our summer break, she pulled “my baby” apart. Not just withered arms, but legs, torso and head too—a vestige of Oliver Cromwell sent back to me in sections labelled: Formatting, Grammar and Spelling, Characters and Plot—Chapter by Chapter. The time, effort, and detail she put into how to fix the novel was a book.

Was there anything right with “my baby”?

I spent the next eighteen months putting the broken and more withered effigy of a novel back together. Again, rather than giving up, I embarked on this project to polish my craft. Story-time with my mum became a regular treat; first for me and then as I improved, for mum too.

When I’d completed putting the pieces back together, I contemplated the prospect of showing the mentor the finished product. But after discussion with another member of the writers’ group, I decided to get a second opinion and engaged another editor. I also re-read “my reworked, unrecognisable baby” to the writers’ group. What a difference! What a change! But still more editing…

In 2014, I recorded my story on audio and then listened to it. Best editing and proof-reading tool ever!

So…after combing through the novels dozens of times…and now all grown up, but perhaps like any of us, not perfect, The Mission of the Unwilling and The Hitch-hiker sit on the Amazon shelves…And now, the book, The Lost World of the Wends which my uncle said was a very, very, no, VERY good idea is, no longer lost, but can be found in the world of published books, too.

And my challenge continues as it has done for the past number of years…Advertising and promotion…and blogging.

Plus, in the last year, the formation of Indie Scriptorium.

© Lee-Anne Marie Kling 2021; updated 2022

Feature Photo/painting: Luthertal —The Lost World of the Wends

     

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